Michelle Hauck is hosting a Holiday query critique blog hop! Come one, come all! Hop on the sled and have some fun helping out fellow writers for the Holidays. Below is the information from her announcement post.
Here’s how it will work:
Post your query letter onto your blog. It can be any genre or age category, but please list this crucial information somewhere in the query letter. Keep your query to 250 – 350 words, give or take a few. No indents and put line space between paragraphs. Include everything you would send an agent: bio, greeting, closing.
Take the url link from your post and add it to the linky list at Michelle’s site . (Click on the button in the post, not in the comments.) Use the list to critique the five people above and below your listing. If you are number 6 then you would feedback numbers 1,2,3,4,5,7,8,9,10,11 on the list. Please leave constructive criticism, but also say what you like about the query. Don’t worry if it’s not your genre, just do your best to give your thoughts.
Here’s my query for a middle-grade fantasy called NINJA SQUIRRELS OF THE HUNDRED ACRE WOOD.
When Kuji, a recent graduate of Black Squirrel Academy, is assigned to the Ninja Squirrels of the Hundred Acre Wood, he doubts his ability to become a member of the elite, clandestine force responsible for protecting the Wood and its inhabitants. He contemplates requesting a transfer to an easier first assignment but decides to take the risk and accept the position as a Ninja Squirrel trainee. Kuji discovers he has found a place to truly call home, a place with good friends and a future. He is quickly put to the test and must prove to himself and the others he is capable of the challenges, even if the difficult training forces him out of his comfort zone.
His arrival, though, has triggered an increase in attacks by the Hundred Acre Wood’s greatest enemy, the Arachne. The Arachne are evil, overgrown spiders and scorpions who will stop at nothing to defeat the Ninja Squirrels and drain the magical power that gives the Wood its innocence and goodness.
Adding to the pressures of a trainee, Master Jonin, the legendary sensei of the Ninja Squirrels, tells Kuji of his destiny to be the kami, the group’s ninth member who is to bind the Ninja Squirrels, make them stronger, and eventually become their leader. Kuji is not sure he can live up to this lofty expectation. He doesn’t know if he can deal with the responsibility of leadership or risk losing being just one of the squirrels, which is his favorite thing about being a member of the team. But, Kuji also realizes that without this kami presence, the Ninja Squirrels will inevitably drift apart and leave the Wood vulnerable to Arachne attack.
The adventures in NINJA SQUIRRELS OF THE HUNDRED ACRE WOOD, a 39,600-word middle-grade fantasy, are stories built around the world created by A. A. Milne in his Winnie-the-Pooh books.
My upper middle-grade historical fiction novel, THE YOUNGER DAYS, was released by the MuseItYoung imprint of MuseItUp Publishing and was awarded the Catholic Writer’s Guild Seal of Approval Award. I have also published three non-fiction football coaching articles in a national coaching magazine.
Thank you for your time and consideration. The complete manuscript is available upon request.